Kia ora Ben. My name is Camille and I am in Room 3 at St Mary’s School in Gisborne.
I liked how you used a range of verbs and how you used a lot of dialogue. I think it’s neat how you put in a famous youtuber/celebrity in your “Zombie House” story! Maybe next time you could add some adverbs to improve your writing? May I ask, how long did it take you to write your story?
Hello Camille, thanks for the comment! I would like to know what a dialogue is? It took two or three days to edit and two days to write it. Next time I will write some adverbs into the story! And mia helped with the book go and cheek out her blog! Ma te wa!
Kia ora Ben.
ReplyDeleteMy name is Camille and I am in Room 3 at St Mary’s School in Gisborne.
I liked how you used a range of verbs and how you used a lot of dialogue.
I think it’s neat how you put in a famous youtuber/celebrity in your “Zombie House” story!
Maybe next time you could add some adverbs to improve your writing?
May I ask, how long did it take you to write your story?
Mā te wā
Camille
Hello Camille, thanks for the comment!
ReplyDeleteI would like to know what a dialogue is?
It took two or three days to edit and two days to write it.
Next time I will write some adverbs into the story!
And mia helped with the book go and cheek out her blog!
Ma te wa!